I like the ambition with the length. I think it would have been a better idea to focus on the quality of drawings though. More inbetweens would help it look smooth.
Weight: Cute story where the guy needs to pick up the dog food to feed his dog! Too bad that his back acts up, right?
I’m not fully convinced about him pulling up the bag of dog food around 0:02. It magically appears in his arms even though he was struggling to pick it up. The lift over his head has struggle, but it’s very brief. I would extend that struggle to allow the audience to fully feel the same way he does. That way when it gets to the back aching scene, the audience can connect with him better. Also, I’m not sure if adding action lines help the animation. In fact, I feel like after he picks it up and his back aches, he would instantly drop the source and hold his back instead of holding it up in the air for a second or two. Also, I can see the dog just eating out of the bag after being frustrated with his owner afterwards.
Impact: I enjoy the facial expressions on the characters. Your story has humor to it too. Actually, it has personality in it! That’s the word I was looking for. You have this cat who is being really mean by knocking the glass over and the person who is getting frustrated from it. It has a nice touch overall.
I feel like I could mention about missing frames, but I feel like you already know that’s an issue, so why delve into that? Actually, I’m more concerned about the person’s movements as they seem somewhat robotic. I feel like her arms would have more of an arc as she’s picking up and placing the glass back on the table. I also have an issue on the very last part of the film as she seems to punch herself in the face. Was that intentional? I don’t know who would punch themselves in the face after being frustrated, but maybe that’s the character’s personality.
Character Design: Phew, I know I’m giving you quite a load to read, but bear with me a bit longer, we’re almost done. I really enjoy the fact that you weren’t limited to human figures! Instead of making a human, you made a different species, which is fantastic! I really enjoy your silhouettes, but they tend to lean more on the tall side. (Oh, number 22 is really nice and number 7 with the “broken” arms is pretty cool too). But I feel like you had fun making these silhouettes, or it might be just my imagination.
Your animation tells a creative, comedic story, you just need a few more frames to make it clear. Some of your frames seem missing but overall the story is readable.
Your character design sketches look unique and varied. I see a lot of interesting shapes happening and nothing looks too alike. The final design is interesting in that this isn't some "standard human" character but a an alien like figure?
The impact animation is cute. I noticed that there are instances where the cat and figure seem to disappear from the frame. Perhaps due to a missing frame? Though, I am also not sure what is suppose to be the impact. Is it the glass that is knocked off or the character smacking her face?
In your weight animation the motion doesn't feel fluid. I think if you added some more inbetweens that would help it flow better. Then the dog's face when it reacts to its owner breaking his back: it feels delayed. Like it should have happened right after the initial "Oh god my back" moment.
Weight: I really liked the story you told in your weight project. I think it's funny and very clear! I think most everyone has already mention this but i looks like your need some more inbetweens on this animation.
Impact: Like with your weight project, you're really good at telling a funny and clear story with your animations! With this one though, I think you need to clean up somethings like the the cup disappearing on some frames, and the cat overlapping the box he is sitting on. I really enjoyed the facial expression in this one too! It helps give personality to your cat and your person in the animation.
Character Design: You have really great range in your silhouettes for your character design. And your finish one is really cute too! I really like that you didn't immediately to go to a human or humanistic figure in your final one like most would ! I think the colors on your character look really nice too! :-D
For the Weight: The back-breaking sequence is a bit confusing because, when he gets the crick in his back, he's standing up pretty straight, but then he flexes outward even more (which would hurt a lot, according to my dad) afterward. Like if someone twists their ankle, they wouldn't keep twisting it after the fact. So his back should already be arching while the pain sets in, and then he can recover afterward
Impact: Most of the figures could use more weight, as the cup kind of flies away in a direction the cat isn't swatting in when the second half comes around.
Design: The middle design you have near the top, with the linework, seems to be the best out of the three you chose. There's that cool perspective warp you see in a lot of graffiti. For the rest of the designs, it would be good to test out more shapes that aren't very clearly human.
I like the ambition with the length. I think it would have been a better idea to focus on the quality of drawings though. More inbetweens would help it look smooth.
ReplyDeleteYour silhouettes are very good. I especially, like number 22. The silhouettes show at lot of personality.
ReplyDeleteIn your impact test, I like the change from standing to sitting in a chair. The zoom in on the lady's face at the end was a good idea.
ReplyDeleteYour lifting test is funny. The bag disappears in a few frames though.
ReplyDeleteYour silhouettes are very good. I especially, like number 22. The silhouettes show at lot of personality.
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ReplyDeleteCute story where the guy needs to pick up the dog food to feed his dog! Too bad that his back acts up, right?
I’m not fully convinced about him pulling up the bag of dog food around 0:02. It magically appears in his arms even though he was struggling to pick it up. The lift over his head has struggle, but it’s very brief. I would extend that struggle to allow the audience to fully feel the same way he does. That way when it gets to the back aching scene, the audience can connect with him better. Also, I’m not sure if adding action lines help the animation. In fact, I feel like after he picks it up and his back aches, he would instantly drop the source and hold his back instead of holding it up in the air for a second or two. Also, I can see the dog just eating out of the bag after being frustrated with his owner afterwards.
Impact:
I enjoy the facial expressions on the characters. Your story has humor to it too. Actually, it has personality in it! That’s the word I was looking for. You have this cat who is being really mean by knocking the glass over and the person who is getting frustrated from it. It has a nice touch overall.
I feel like I could mention about missing frames, but I feel like you already know that’s an issue, so why delve into that? Actually, I’m more concerned about the person’s movements as they seem somewhat robotic. I feel like her arms would have more of an arc as she’s picking up and placing the glass back on the table. I also have an issue on the very last part of the film as she seems to punch herself in the face. Was that intentional? I don’t know who would punch themselves in the face after being frustrated, but maybe that’s the character’s personality.
Character Design:
Phew, I know I’m giving you quite a load to read, but bear with me a bit longer, we’re almost done. I really enjoy the fact that you weren’t limited to human figures! Instead of making a human, you made a different species, which is fantastic! I really enjoy your silhouettes, but they tend to lean more on the tall side. (Oh, number 22 is really nice and number 7 with the “broken” arms is pretty cool too). But I feel like you had fun making these silhouettes, or it might be just my imagination.
Your animation tells a creative, comedic story, you just need a few more frames to make it clear. Some of your frames seem missing but overall the story is readable.
ReplyDeleteYour character design sketches look unique and varied. I see a lot of interesting shapes happening and nothing looks too alike. The final design is interesting in that this isn't some "standard human" character but a an alien like figure?
ReplyDeleteThe impact animation is cute. I noticed that there are instances where the cat and figure seem to disappear from the frame. Perhaps due to a missing frame? Though, I am also not sure what is suppose to be the impact. Is it the glass that is knocked off or the character smacking her face?
In your weight animation the motion doesn't feel fluid. I think if you added some more inbetweens that would help it flow better. Then the dog's face when it reacts to its owner breaking his back: it feels delayed. Like it should have happened right after the initial "Oh god my back" moment.
Weight: I really liked the story you told in your weight project. I think it's funny and very clear! I think most everyone has already mention this but i looks like your need some more inbetweens on this animation.
ReplyDeleteImpact: Like with your weight project, you're really good at telling a funny and clear story with your animations! With this one though, I think you need to clean up somethings like the the cup disappearing on some frames, and the cat overlapping the box he is sitting on. I really enjoyed the facial expression in this one too! It helps give personality to your cat and your person in the animation.
Character Design:
You have really great range in your silhouettes for your character design. And your finish one is really cute too! I really like that you didn't immediately to go to a human or humanistic figure in your final one like most would ! I think the colors on your character look really nice too! :-D
Weight: Good story being told, needs a little more work on pacing and inbetweens.
ReplyDeleteImpact: I like the humor in it. Seems like a rough draft and if finished completely will be very nice.
Character Design: I like all of them but lean towards number 13. I like your final choice. Its more like a kid's cartoon.
For the Weight: The back-breaking sequence is a bit confusing because, when he gets the crick in his back, he's standing up pretty straight, but then he flexes outward even more (which would hurt a lot, according to my dad) afterward. Like if someone twists their ankle, they wouldn't keep twisting it after the fact. So his back should already be arching while the pain sets in, and then he can recover afterward
ReplyDeleteImpact: Most of the figures could use more weight, as the cup kind of flies away in a direction the cat isn't swatting in when the second half comes around.
Design: The middle design you have near the top, with the linework, seems to be the best out of the three you chose. There's that cool perspective warp you see in a lot of graffiti. For the rest of the designs, it would be good to test out more shapes that aren't very clearly human.
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